Wow Hale, you just listed three of my most favorite action guy heroes in one post! Good job! On a semi-related note, Griffith seemes kind of like Wash from Firefly, while Jess seemes like Kaley with Zoe's badass combat training.
Also, I'm planning on you guys having to deal with a doorman A.I when you get to The Academy so I'm going to call Damon's order The Order of the Last Frontier until you say otherwise. That's what was in your CC after all. The A.I's also going to be able to identify Damon since he's someone Mengsk would know about. Someone who would be labled a member of a "terrorist group." Also, I'm going to have Jess and Helena taken to a hospital ward if Vix doesn't mind. Not a secret torture lab thingy, an actual hospital ward. Mengsk wants Jess rested and healthy before he rides her ass and I suspect Orla would want the same for Helena.
And Shaded, does Ponder know you scripted Griffith like you did?